My favourite piece of writing

The nerves and frustrations were melting in my head, was I going to win or not that was the two words that were repeating in my my head., We were on course number 16 in Taupo mini golf it looked like it was going to a thriller of a finish the scores felt like they were pretty close so I had to play smart and safe 1 2 3 I couldn't believe it Cayleb Rauto had got a hole in one and on the other hand I had got a hole in 2 and my mum had got a hole in 3. I took to my normal positions at the start of the course boom boom I could feel my heart thumping Cayleb swung , 2 Cayleb said in a excited voice it was a close score again. Hole 18 the last hole,for the last time I took my position I felt so professional like I was tiger woods but of course not I wasn't him no where as good as him or as rich as him and we were just at a mini golf course not a pounce golf course like pros use. Whoosh as the breeze brushed passed me as I swung, dammit it wasn't the dream hit I imagined to be like, I finished the hole with a score of 3 after we had all a turn we head did to the office to hand in our golf clubs then the time came the grand finally was upon us how had won, Its a tie Cayleb expressed in a disappointed voice. well as the day came to a close we decided to head to MacDonald to feed our disappointed and our hunger then we headed back to my aunt's new house and relaxed for the night.

I liked this piece of writing because it sums up my holiday which was fun.
I need to improve on my variety of sentences starters.